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    dots Submission Name: December, I Love You.dots

    Author: Celeste J. Bell
    ASL Info:    27 Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 261/310/148
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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       when shit hits the fan, write really bad poetry. doesn't matter if it sucks, just feels good to clean out my soul

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    dotsDecember, I Love You.dots

    Disaster on the mountain top
    waiting patiently to fall back down.
    Roll over me, consume my limbs
    and shower me with obliterated hope.

    She says unfaithful, he says to trust.
    Who I shall believe is yet to be found
    but here I sit thinking it over and over,
    anxious for what I'm ignoring.

    What I wouldn't give to be bulletproof,
    a shatterproof proof of proof itself
    surviving the onslaught of jealous women
    and wandering-eyed men.

    Wait and see, time will tell, and other clichés
    will not sedate my thirst for what I don't know
    despite my fear of knowing it
    as it sits on the mountain, looming.

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      I know all too well the feelings in this piece and grim is right-its a great piece of writing. I love all of it but in particular the following lines:

    Wait and see, time will tell, and other clichés
    will not sedate my thirst for what I don't know

    It is a good thing to clear your soul :) poetry is good for our souls even when only written for ourselves and never intended to be a masterpiece-it is still a masterpiece of our lives...
    | Posted on 2010-07-29 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      this doesn't seem to suck at all! I think its a great peace of writing! I loved the first part when you write

    "She says unfaithful, he says to trust"

    I think its one of my fav lines of this poem. I also like :

    "What I wouldn't give to be bulletproof'

    thats somthing we all would love to be. bullet proof from the pain of emotions.
    Its a great write.!
    | Posted on 2010-07-29 00:00:00 | by grimmreaper | [ Reply to This ]

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