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    dots Submission Name: Faded ink stainsdots
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    Author: grimmreaper
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 122/43/23
    Words: 629
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    I was the first one
    that tried to die.

    But for some reason
    you where there.

    I don't know why.
    I don't even know how.

    Because I never told you
    my plan

    all I did that day.
    Was tell you goodbye

    over our phone
    conversation.

    Maybe...you heard it
    in my voice.

    Or maybe it was when
    I confessed I loved you.

    Maybe it was chance
    or maybe

    …..

    Maybe, you just knew
    like you knew everything

    else there was to know
    about me.

    But either way
    you where there.

    You held me in your arms
    and you cried.

    You told me,
    not to give up

    You told me
    not to let go.

    You said without me
    You couldn't live
    I remember
    how sad I felt

    when I heard
    your voice break.

    I wanted to comfort you
    to tell you

    that it was okay
    for me to go.

    That the world
    was much better off.


    Because
    the pain peter.

    The pain was too much.
    The pain in my head.

    It just never went away.
    No matter what I tried.

    It was like
    it was eating me up inside.

    To the point
    where there was nothing left

    Inside.
    I can only starve my self

    For so long.
    So why Peter

    Why couldn't you
    just have let me go.

    Why couldn't you
    have let me be free

    from the pain
    inside my thoughts

    Why did you make me promise
    that day in the hospital

    To fight no matter what
    to keep going no matter what

    Why did you give me false hope
    only so to reach this point.

    I tried to kill my self first.
    ….......

    And I failed....
    Because of you Peter.

    I tried to let go.
    To leave the pain.

    But you showed up
    and bound my wrist

    And you waited
    by my side

    tell they arrived.
    And even than

    You where there
    in the waiting room.

    Waiting...
    for me to make it.

    And now Peter
    I am in the waiting room

    waiting...
    for Only God knows what.

    Waiting for them to come
    and tell us

    that you didn't make it.
    To tell us, that you are gone.

    Gone from my side.
    Gone from my life.

    Why Peter.
    Why did you do it.

    Didn't you realize
    that when you pulled the trigger

    You wouldn't only kill
    your self

    but you would
    kill me too?

    Don't you see
    that I am died now too?

    You made me promise.
    Promise to never give up

    Despite what happened.
    All for what

    So I can watch you
    give up.

    So I can be here
    helping your mother

    plan your funeral.
    So I

    Can stand here
    in the pouring rain

    Hearing your mother
    wail her heart out

    as they bury you
    in the ground

    Six feet
    away from her heart

    I guess you weren't
    so strong after all.

    I guess you where a lair
    when you told me,, you loved me.

    Because it you loved me
    I wouldn't

    have to travel sixteen miles
    to visit your grave sight.

    I wouldn't have
    to bear the pain

    Of you no longer
    being here.

    I will never forgive you
    Peter.

    For letting me give you
    my heart.

    and like faded ink stains
    your absence will for ever be

    unwashable and unforgivable




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    ||| Comments |||
      This... brought tears to my eyes. It is a very emotional piece. I... too just recently lost a friend to suicide... How hard it is, to keep going. But we must! There is always another day, another chance, a new beginning. My condolences... <3
    | Posted on 2011-01-20 00:00:00 | by ShadowsnLights | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow-blown away! This very well written and very powerful-i am sorry if this is something you experienced personally-words are not enough to express my condolences.

    This poem expresses well the questions, confusion and grief that any person would be left with after losing someone that way.

    I have no suggestions because i like it raw and as is. stormy
    | Posted on 2010-07-29 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]


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