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    dots Submission Name: Twodots
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    Author: Celeste J. Bell
    ASL Info:    27 Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.84 - 261/310/148
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsTwodots
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    Intoxicated rhythm
    breath, touch, breath
    pacing the feast of eyes.
    Aflame approaching cinders,
    bound tightly in the denial of taking the fall.
    But those hands stay braced
    against the filmy shield between,
    grazing over imperfections imprinting the surface.
    Hurry to slow the pace, devouring
    scents as time flies beyond the sunrise.
    One frozen moment left for savoring
    as thoughts of fingertips and shivers resurface.




    Submitted on 2010-07-29 18:26:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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