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    dots Submission Name: Bridge to Serendipitydots

    Author: Daniel_moore
    Elite Ratio:    0.78 - 12/26/28
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsBridge to Serendipitydots

    As I trekked all alone down a grassy plain,

    Chilled, verdant shoots caressed my feet,

    As my Will inside me began to wane,

    And desolate thoughts filled my brain,

    I saw a wooden sign a'hidden, discrete,

    I stepped closer to see roughly carved embossing,

    Deceiving letters read "S-E-R-E-N-D-I-P-I-T-Y",

    And the sign pointed to a cobblestone crossing,

    O'er the deepest dark crevice I began walking,

    As the bridge started to crumble unknowingly,

    And as the moon shined bright with faux colors of God,

    I saw the stars were no longer skillfully plotted,

    And as my eyes peered down it struck me as odd,

    For there were man-like beasts with mouths in the sod,

    My Heart fell down, far and hard, as I glanced to where I had trotted,

    Alas! No bridge, my Soul's sole link,

    A synthetic aroma crept into each lung,

    That I can vaguely describe as tasting of ink,

    And my Heart continued to anxiously sink,

    As it sang the most sorrowful song ever sung.

    Submitted on 2010-07-30 20:14:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a beautiful poem. I had to read it 3 times.
    Back on topic.
    It flowed very well, had beautiful vocabulary, and excellent imagery. I won't try to tell you what it means like some will because no one ever truly knows the meaning behind a poem they didn't write and it seems a little vain to think I can.
    This is definitely a favorite.

    | Posted on 2010-08-04 00:00:00 | by Hazy skies | [ Reply to This ]
      Good stuff. It puts realism in man like beasts.
    | Posted on 2010-07-30 00:00:00 | by Humanfly | [ Reply to This ]

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