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    dots Submission Name: What Makes Me?dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Spoof/Venting
    Total Views: 510
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1156



    Description:
       Its been a bad work both jobs I work I just ... I feel like the dirt people walk on. No matter the amout of favors I do for others No matter the countless times I sacriface my days off to go in to help them out... I am treated and talked down too...


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    dotsWhat Makes Me?dots
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    What makes me so vulnerable?
    How am I easy prey for those whom linger within my darkness
    What makes me, me?

    Beaten down, I am.
    Broken to the core, I am.

    Nothing remains ...
    I have no drive
    My will power has vanished

    For others have taken their toll on
    My body,
    My spirit,
    My soul...

    I try...
    I do my best

    "The glass is half full NOT half empty"

    Nevertheless I am beginning to see things in another light
    Taken advantage of daily I am
    Taken for granted I'll always be
    TAKE!!! TAKE!!! is how it's been

    I can only hold on for so long...
    Til' one day I loose my grip




    Submitted on 2010-07-30 20:43:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I know how hard it can be to hold on. Please keep trying to , There are those out here who DO NOT want anything of you other for you to smile and know that you have a reason and a purpose in this life. Even if it does not seem to be clear to you at this time.
    I treasure the friendship that I thought we'd found even if it has been far too long since we've talked. You see I understand losing your grip and not feeling as if you can hold on much longer.
    YOU ARE NOT ALONE>
    Heather
    | Posted on 2010-07-31 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


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