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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Depressed
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    Express to me I beg of you!
    Give me some kind of hint!!
    Some kind of explanation ...

    Why do you treat me in such manners?
    Why do you wish to speak of me as a dog?
    Give me orders as if I am still 10yr olds.

    What gives you the right?
    What have I done to make this alright?

    Once again
    I beg of you to explain yourself
    I long to defend myself

    Yet an inner voice stops me
    I long to keep my employment at your establishment,
    then again I wish to not be treated in such horrid ways




    Submitted on 2010-07-30 21:04:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Long time no read. I've been looking to see if you had posted anything recently I've been kinda worried about you.
    Once again your writing conveys struggle and hurt.
    I hope all is well with you I am here if you need.
    Heather
    | Posted on 2010-07-31 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


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