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    dots Submission Name: as long as its fakedots
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    Author: Jimi James
    ASL Info:    24/m/somehwere
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 90/78/41
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 929
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 669



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       has been a while.
    insults are welcome as well as criticism.
    just wanna hear if someone finds out what i'm trying to say. if someone gets it.


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    dotsas long as its fakedots
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    boulevards, sidewalks,
    loners and teams,
    thus i think,
    i'd have learned to sink.

    pass on, pass around,
    precious love,
    though not bound,
    everywhere to be found.

    on streets and boulevards,
    imitations of music,
    reproductions of the highest art,
    everywhere to be found.

    let it slip, let it taunt,
    the finest placebo,
    the most royal cheat,
    all are gone who daunt,

    whos not jealous of those
    who are right to suppose
    they're loving folks?
    its all too little,
    every dose.






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    ||| Comments |||
      I've read this a few times and to me, as a musician, I find I must appreciate peoples desire to plagiarize, or look like a loner against the team. In conclusion I agree, I think, there's not enough love in the world, especially that which is intended for all. Thats my translational interpretation, I'd be interested to know how far off I am.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2012-11-09 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Great Job with writing it, but its very very vague.
    | Posted on 2010-08-02 00:00:00 | by stormybluerose | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool, but to me it's not a placebo but quite real.
    | Posted on 2010-07-31 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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