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    dots Submission Name: I DON'T CARE WHETHER OR NOT YOU CLICK ON THISdots

    Author: Jeniffer
    ASL Info:    18/f/earth
    Elite Ratio:    5.76 - 240/279/81
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/What is
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    I intend to write this poem
    The way I want to be;
    Unlike anything.
    The way I am.
    To prove genuine
    To do what others attempt
    To give my innermost in it’s most palpable form
    To impress with my wit
    Escape history.

    And so
    I become everybody else.

    I’ve copped out
    And decided that I don’t care
    If my words don’t sound original
    So long as they are sweet
    Coming out
    So long as I let them have weight
    That I can feel being taken from my brain
    So long as I run my mind over their texture
    Like a dog rolling in something intoxicating
    You may have heard them before,
    but they are mine
    Because I have tasted them.

    Even if it doesn’t sound like
    It took me an hour to write this line

    It did

    Submitted on 2010-08-01 05:23:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You only have to write them for you... if the rest of the world doesn't "get it", then they weren't meant to be inside your head anyway, is my guess.

    As for the hour.... at least it was productive. I've spent well over 10, with a million words on the tips of my finger-thoughts, never making a single entry...
    | Posted on 2011-02-16 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't care about the twelve rules for proper commentary either. This has the taste of a work wedged between what might be considered your weightier, more powerful works - the afterglow of the pleasure mingled with the expectation of success.

    In other words, you've written this for you.

    Savor the rebellion.
    | Posted on 2010-08-01 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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