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    dots Submission Name: Not Enough.... Never Enoughdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Rant/Depressed
    Total Views: 464
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       i try and try and try i give and give and give... neverthless its not enough


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    dotsNot Enough.... Never Enoughdots
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    What makes me destined to fail?
    Why am I an endless disappointment?

    No matter my efforts,
    or the lengthy strides to please,
    I am never fit enough,
    nor smart enough to success.

    Why is this?

    Why am I always plagued with regret?
    Why does this dark cloud hang above me?

    I am physically exhausted
    I have perused every possible avenue and yet I am a failure.

    Emotionally there is nothing left of me,
    for all of my feelings get tangled within every obstacle I am faced
    As I fail to overcome these obstacles
    My being
    My pride
    My spirit
    fails along with them...




    Submitted on 2010-08-01 05:45:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Sad piece. But carries an all too clear message. Jackz you are quite a. Poet but one whose works major in depression it's obvius you tell it as you ? it. But never doubt it you got stuff mmaybe soon your work will feature in antropology that is if someone has stollen it yet. But you still got spelling hurdle before you e.g succeed not success but you aaare good to go.
    | Posted on 2010-08-03 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]


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