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    dots Submission Name: Going Backdots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Rant/Longing
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       wishing i could be who i use to be...

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    dotsGoing Backdots

    I long to have the confurt I once sought out for
    I ach for what use to be
    Go back in time and have those walls
    *the protection*
    Take back all the people whom I've trusted over these years

    I ravel in the "What if's" daily
    Looking for a doorway that will lead be back to the better days

    Days where...

    I was not weak
    When I could have friends & then again have no friends all at the very sametime!
    Days would come and go with no second thought
    For my body was numb
    pretending all was well

    Every fiber of my being aches to go back...

    Submitted on 2010-08-01 05:52:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The past used to be the present... and as always, a day will come where we will long for these very days of our present ... as much as we currently hate them.
    That's how we work :P... always longing for the past ...hoping for the future..
    and yeah check some of the spelling
    | Posted on 2010-08-07 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Ache not for the past but for the future. >:}
    Good poem, throwing in the odd rhyme scheme would give it a little kick tbh but not bad at all. Check some of the spelling xD

    | Posted on 2010-08-03 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]

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