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    dots Submission Name: Death's Kissdots

    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 54/139/173
    Words: 255
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsDeath's Kissdots

    The dust whirs about my body.
    A cyclone of debris.
    Leaving a vapor in its wake.
    Making it hard to see.

    Headlights in the distance are clear.
    Approaching but far away.
    Beyond the dust.
    The vehicle makes way.
    Gripping the gravel as it glides.
    Swaying around the bends and turns.
    The sun is overhead.
    The light rapidly burns.

    And as the car approaches to the left,
    I feel the fear arise.
    The tinted window rolls down,
    And I meet the blackened eyes.

    The dead voice chills my spine.
    Causing bumps up my back.
    And he grimaces a bit.
    And leaps for the attack.

    Through the window into the sky.
    His ghostly body hovers above ground.
    And he scream a ghoulish howl.
    Piercing the surrounding sound.

    He banks in closer for the view.
    Face to face with death.
    And the air turns icy cold.
    I draw a long trembling breathe.
    Exhaling a vapor of heat.
    He speaks into me.
    "Witness what you will.
    I am what you see!
    By the end of our meet.
    Your soul will be mine."
    His words are hollow.
    They send a chill through my spine.
    The hairs standing on edge.
    And he wreaks of death.
    From the dead grip,
    To the rancid breath.

    And with no more to wait.
    He goes in for the strike.
    My vision blurs and my breathing halts.
    My heart beats start to spike.
    I close my eyes.
    And remember bliss.
    In that moment I die,
    By Death's fatal kiss.

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