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The Beauty Of The Unknown


Author: Ghetto_King
ASL Info:    19 m ft. lauderdale
Elite Ratio:    0.76 - 4 /33 /54
Words: 246
Class/Type: Poetry /What is
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The Beauty Of The Unknown



The Beauty of the Unknown

Sometimes the brightest star is the hardest to see

sometimes our closes dreams are the hardest to reach

with so much to say but the words farthest from speech

The beauty of the unknown

what would the days be like if we always know the outcome

how would it be different from the different days and nights

what would be the difference in waking up the next morning and dreaming the coming night

beauty of the unknown

being loss in times and moment losing the clutches of times

loss in the rhythm of joy and the one your around

drown in experience and the memories that we sketch through one anothers loss time

as different things of whats next crosses each parties mind

loss in a bottle of nervousness, butterflies, what will be and what is

but the unknown of what that may be which leaves us chilled

vines that can grow and go many different places

which could venture to hearts and grow to smiling faces

the unknown which can bloom into daisy roses or tulips

that which can make a single kiss seem like forever but the moments the fewest

the unknown which can turn into the known with limitless beauty


 like a blank page to a poem that can grab the essences of beauty




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Submission Name: The Beauty Of The Unknown
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Author: Ghetto_King
ASL Info: 19 m ft. lauderdale
Elite Ratio: 0.78 - 4/32/54
Words: 246
Class/Type: Poetry/What is
Total Views: 3
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The Beauty Of The Unknown
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The Beauty of the Unknown

Where depression may verse hope

Sometimes the brightest star is the hardest to see

Sometimes dreams of reason are the hardest to dream

Sometimes our closest dreams are the hardest to reach

Time passing, lives becoming iron casted, then in answers to softly speak

With so much to say yet those words lay farthest from speech

The beauty of the unknown

what would the days be like if we always knew the outcome

Would our drive be the same, would we drink from the fountain

How would each passing moment differ from each different day or night

Whys and wheres lay in insight, in time to be found
in duty of reflection, time of reciting

what would be the difference in waking up the next morning and dreaming the coming night (I like this line)

beauty of the unknown

being at a loss in moments and losing the clutches of time

Lost and alive in life's soul sound

lost in the rhythm of joy and enjoying the one your around

Drowned in experiences, drenched in memories that we scribe through one and others minds
Inside of lost time

Breaking barriers when queries collide, as
different things of whats next crosses each parties mind
Residing to common will and trying not to part at anytime with worries

lost in a battle of nervousness and butterflies for what is and what will be

The unknown of what that may be is what leaves us chilled and thrilled at once

Vines that can grow and go many different places
which could venture to hearts and grow into smiling faces

The unknown which can bloom into Daisies, Roses or Tulips
Gardenias and bluets foretelling of futures

That which can make a single kiss seem like forever, but these moments seem the fewest but by far the truest

The unknown which can turn into the known with limitless beauty

The truth of the unknown is to be fought for and not for presuming.





 like a blank page to a poem that can grab the essences of beauty

Hope you don't mind, I added a bit and fixed it up a little. Tell me not to if you like, but I took the time to do it as i thoroughly enjoyed your work.
| Posted on 2010-08-03 00:00:00 | by Demister | [ Reply to This ]


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