Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: The Beauty Of The Unknowndots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Ghetto_King
    ASL Info:    19 m ft. lauderdale
    Elite Ratio:    0.76 - 4/33/54
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Poetry/What is
    Total Views: 780
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1513



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsThe Beauty Of The Unknowndots
    -------------------------------------------


    The Beauty of the Unknown

    Sometimes the brightest star is the hardest to see

    sometimes our closes dreams are the hardest to reach

    with so much to say but the words farthest from speech

    The beauty of the unknown

    what would the days be like if we always know the outcome

    how would it be different from the different days and nights

    what would be the difference in waking up the next morning and dreaming the coming night

    beauty of the unknown

    being loss in times and moment losing the clutches of times

    loss in the rhythm of joy and the one your around

    drown in experience and the memories that we sketch through one anothers loss time

    as different things of whats next crosses each parties mind

    loss in a bottle of nervousness, butterflies, what will be and what is

    but the unknown of what that may be which leaves us chilled

    vines that can grow and go many different places

    which could venture to hearts and grow to smiling faces

    the unknown which can bloom into daisy roses or tulips

    that which can make a single kiss seem like forever but the moments the fewest

    the unknown which can turn into the known with limitless beauty


     like a blank page to a poem that can grab the essences of beauty




    Submitted on 2010-08-02 14:57:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      


    Submission Name: The Beauty Of The Unknown
    --------------------------------------------------------




    Author: Ghetto_King
    ASL Info: 19 m ft. lauderdale
    Elite Ratio: 0.78 - 4/32/54
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Poetry/What is
    Total Views: 3
    Average Vote: No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1513



    Commentary type requested: Unbiased Review
    [ Recent comments given by Ghetto_King. ]

    Description:






    The Beauty Of The Unknown
    -------------------------------------------

    The Beauty of the Unknown

    Where depression may verse hope

    Sometimes the brightest star is the hardest to see

    Sometimes dreams of reason are the hardest to dream

    Sometimes our closest dreams are the hardest to reach

    Time passing, lives becoming iron casted, then in answers to softly speak

    With so much to say yet those words lay farthest from speech

    The beauty of the unknown

    what would the days be like if we always knew the outcome

    Would our drive be the same, would we drink from the fountain

    How would each passing moment differ from each different day or night

    Whys and wheres lay in insight, in time to be found
    in duty of reflection, time of reciting

    what would be the difference in waking up the next morning and dreaming the coming night (I like this line)

    beauty of the unknown

    being at a loss in moments and losing the clutches of time

    Lost and alive in life's soul sound

    lost in the rhythm of joy and enjoying the one your around

    Drowned in experiences, drenched in memories that we scribe through one and others minds
    Inside of lost time

    Breaking barriers when queries collide, as
    different things of whats next crosses each parties mind
    Residing to common will and trying not to part at anytime with worries

    lost in a battle of nervousness and butterflies for what is and what will be

    The unknown of what that may be is what leaves us chilled and thrilled at once

    Vines that can grow and go many different places
    which could venture to hearts and grow into smiling faces

    The unknown which can bloom into Daisies, Roses or Tulips
    Gardenias and bluets foretelling of futures

    That which can make a single kiss seem like forever, but these moments seem the fewest but by far the truest

    The unknown which can turn into the known with limitless beauty

    The truth of the unknown is to be fought for and not for presuming.





     like a blank page to a poem that can grab the essences of beauty

    Hope you don't mind, I added a bit and fixed it up a little. Tell me not to if you like, but I took the time to do it as i thoroughly enjoyed your work.
    | Posted on 2010-08-03 00:00:00 | by Demister | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    186451

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry