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    dots Submission Name: Watch Your Backdots

    Author: cherrywillow
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 29/47/32
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsWatch Your Backdots

    Hear my screams
    And let fall,
    Drag me down to hell.
    Watch my tears,
    See me bleed,
    Have you nothing to say?
    You know my pain and even
    So you turn your back
    And slit my throat.
    See me choke,
    The words left unsaid.
    Watch me drown in my own blood.
    I cringe, you laugh.
    Have you any sense.
    Watch your back,
    For I am near to an end.
    Take a careful and quite step
    And hope I won't crack.
    For if I do, screams of anger will
    poor like blood from my slit wrists.
    Watch your back,
    For if I break I will create
    My own end.....

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      This sad and scary, but you got it said! I wish good and kind things for you.

    | Posted on 2010-08-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! What an excruciating pain. The real valor is in bearing the poignancy and not running away from it.
    | Posted on 2010-08-06 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! What an excruciating pain. The real valor is in bearing the poignancy and not running away from it.
    | Posted on 2010-08-06 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      Always remember to find something that makes you happy in these moments. Most people would say writing, listening to music, and nice things like those. But in my case it's alcohol. Just throwin' that out there. I'm probably gonna get alot of heat from this comment but I believe any measure is better than suicide. Suicide is for those too weak to face the unknown or painful.

    Always remember to smile,
    | Posted on 2010-08-04 00:00:00 | by Hazy skies | [ Reply to This ]
      wow that an expression of real anger
    death is just step of change
    i take to don't take change very well
    | Posted on 2010-08-04 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]

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