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    dots Submission Name: Desert of Despairdots
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    Author: LaughingGuest
    Elite Ratio:    1.64 - 5/6/14
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Them
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    dotsDesert of Despairdots
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    So you're "Peligro?"
    Everything dies
    don't you know?
    All life is a lie
    just like the ego.

    So you're "Peligro?"
    into desert it all goes.
    Fed to the horse;
    the enemys corpse.
    We thought you should know..

    So you're "Peligro?"
    with candles, into the cemetery,
    burning on the headstone.
    Pigs blood splashed wearily
    suddenly all alone.

    A beast sleeping quick
    being poked with a stick.
    Awakened and irked;
    shredding in one big jerk
    claws rained from the sky
    tearing everything from life.




    Submitted on 2010-08-04 18:41:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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