Desert of Despair

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Desert of Despair

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So you're "Peligro?" Everything dies don't you know? All life is a lie just like the ego. So you're "Peligro?" into desert it all goes. Fed to the horse; the enemys corpse. We thought you should know.. So you're "Peligro?" with candles, into the cemetery, burning on the headstone. Pigs blood splashed wearily suddenly all alone. A beast sleeping quick being poked with a stick. Awakened and irked; shredding in one big jerk claws rained from the sky tearing everything from life.

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