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Desert of Despair


Author: LaughingGuest
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Words: 85
Class/Type: Poetry /Them
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Desert of Despair



So you're "Peligro?"
Everything dies
don't you know?
All life is a lie
just like the ego.

So you're "Peligro?"
into desert it all goes.
Fed to the horse;
the enemys corpse.
We thought you should know..

So you're "Peligro?"
with candles, into the cemetery,
burning on the headstone.
Pigs blood splashed wearily
suddenly all alone.

A beast sleeping quick
being poked with a stick.
Awakened and irked;
shredding in one big jerk
claws rained from the sky
tearing everything from life.




Submitted on 2010-08-04 18:41:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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