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    dots Submission Name: Desert of Despairdots

    Author: LaughingGuest
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    dotsDesert of Despairdots

    So you're "Peligro?"
    Everything dies
    don't you know?
    All life is a lie
    just like the ego.

    So you're "Peligro?"
    into desert it all goes.
    Fed to the horse;
    the enemys corpse.
    We thought you should know..

    So you're "Peligro?"
    with candles, into the cemetery,
    burning on the headstone.
    Pigs blood splashed wearily
    suddenly all alone.

    A beast sleeping quick
    being poked with a stick.
    Awakened and irked;
    shredding in one big jerk
    claws rained from the sky
    tearing everything from life.

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