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    dots Submission Name: Rude Assholesdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Angst
    Total Views: 512
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       Day in and day out I do nothing but work 2jobs 3rd shift gas statio attendent and waitress during the day Men are rude even co-workers... WHAT WOULD THEY ALL DO IF THEY KNEW?


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    dotsRude Assholesdots
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    I take shit from you all day after day.
    Grabbing my ass when the chance arrives, you do!
    Making vulgor comments is second nature, to you all!

    So I have to question?
    How'd you all act had you known the truth?
    If you seen my body with no clothes?
    The scars are not small to say the very least.
    They scattered my body due to my own actions,
    my own wrong doings

    A failure to the core
    I am for I couldn't even get a 12 gauge shot gun to take my own life!
    Longing to die a slow and painfull death,
    I placed the gun to my stomach as I played with the safety.
    I invisioned my chldhood,
    as it was,
    as it should have been!

    I remeber them touching me!
    I remeber her, my Mother not helping me
    ...
    I pull the triger and it happened!!!!!
    Safety was OFF

    Now that I've said this
    Now that you know what lyes benath my clothes
    Will you leave me alone?
    Will you stop grabbing my ass?
    Can you please stop ...
    PLEASE




    Submitted on 2010-08-07 13:17:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Omg this is amazing.and I feel such connection with this.complete connection.I wish I was more than an object to whom hurt me2
    Too.and I tried and didn't succed to my slow and painful angst out of this world sumthing I craved for a long time.hope to move to sumwhere better where the pain was just gone.but honestly I'm so connected with ur work all I can say is thank u:) ur amazing!!!
    | Posted on 2010-11-02 00:00:00 | by childoftears | [ Reply to This ]
      Now I can't believe I'm the first to comment this. I guess people just don't have an interest in good literature anymore. I believe this site has gone to hell over the years that I've been using it.
    I love the way you spill your guts in this piece. Ask the question that should be asked my women every where. Men at times don't understand that we are not mere objects. We too are people just like them. KUDOS!
    | Posted on 2010-08-31 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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