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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Alone
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       I tell you no joke I can write so well as I lye in bed thinking... pratically crying longing for all I have yet to accomplish yet I sit in front of my computer and... I get NO where


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    A blank screen lies in front of me
    yet I cannot write
    My mind is blank
    Although this will not be the case as I lye this worn body down for a few hours of restless sleep
    My mind always on high speed
    There is no switch to turn it off
    or at least I have yet to find it
    5am it is yet I am not asleep
    70hr work week has passed
    .... I am not sleep??
    Another 70hr work week is in store for me
    This does not phase me
    For I have my artificial energy drinks to get me through my days

    I long to know all the unanswered questions
    I wish to know why I am at a constant battle
    What makes me ... Fighting the world
    And the world effortlessly winning?






    Submitted on 2010-08-09 03:20:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel a lot more than often that we young ppl work too much and as much as we work we struggle to find that thing that will slow us down.I remember telling myself everytime I go thru a moment of feeling too exhausted that I wish everything can just stop and pause for a moment to get myself back together as a whole.You know, collect yourself and refresh.You described what so many ppl ask of themselves every single day on this planet.I don't think that your not control of your life.I think you've lost control of your sleeping habits bc of overworking.I'm in the same boat bc I have a night job and worrying has been so common for me lately.Jackie you need a vacation lol seriously.Bc when you get away from the normal crap that surrounds you day to day you can break and draw out a new plan to kill off the stress when you go back to square one and start.Sometimes don't you just strongly wish you can just start from scratch? Well my comment is long so it's obviously I like this piece. "Yet I cannot write." "5am it is yet I am not asleep" "few hours of restless sleep" "There is no switch to turn it off" I love this one cause I'm drowning with hurts tryna get back up and sleeping issues make it worse with all these nightmares of dying and being forgotten so u really helped me here.Just when I sleep on your work you come thru again with another one that touches me.Thanx Jackie Have a blessed one.You still a survivor and rose from all the [censored] u been thru.I know you'll continue to keep climbing and rising cause somewhere inside you, your not just gonna give up.Peace J.Just try to get some rest when you can.
    | Posted on 2010-08-13 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      Happy day girl!

    I may suggest meditation 2 get u centered - Deepak on his website, has 21 days of guided mediation 4 free!

    I hand write all my pieces prior 2 posting - I can't sit in front of a screen & get "right" 2 "write" - find your place of comfort & go from there. Expression is freedom not a timeline...

    Sending free & creative writing smiles 2 share ;-) ;-) ;-)
    | Posted on 2010-08-12 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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