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    dots Submission Name: Sonnet - The Shadows Wifedots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSonnet - The Shadows Wifedots
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    To attain oneness I must admire peace.
    Trying to reach; I try - A step behind.
    A constant nature that can never cease -
    For I am darkness -- A shadow to find,

    A way to be encased in your glowing,
    light --- Love me please; Turn and illuminate.
    Only your hand can clear the growing
    shadows that beseech; They intimidate.

    Paradigm -- Some how a piece does not fit.
    I have a heart; Yet I do not feel life.
    Hope springs eternal - Help me from this pit.
    Look into your own eyes -- Husband and wife.

    Not a soliloquy for our prologue
    Just dark speaking to light in epilogue




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