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    dots Submission Name: Smolderingdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 348
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    dotsSmolderingdots
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    I feel sick
    And I'm quite bitter
    And I hate this hate
    With a raging passion

    Take your pick
    I advise you leave
    For my eyes may sear
    A hole of some fashion

    Today is not the day
    The next person that speaks
    I have so much longing
    To pull lungs from their spine

    I'll let it slip away
    And bite my tongue
    And stunt my charge
    I'll step back from that line

    But if you want to brawl
    Then let us settle this now
    Line up by twos and fours
    And let me vent out all my pain

    And I think I might fall
    And lose myself to nothingness
    I'm tired of these sick, harsh trials
    When I know it will end in vain

    Please take me out of this game
    The only passion I have is hate
    And this feeling is infected by everything
    Spreads like wildfire with no real goal

    But I still feel things like shame
    Agony, regret, and longing too
    And pride stops in from time to time
    Please just give back what you stole

    And all these feelings will cool to simmer
    And my composure will return despite
    Though I hardly see the purpose
    Of the very breath I have inside

    And when you focus, the lights are dimmer
    Like walking backwards facing your goal
    Frustrating failures are becoming of effort
    And with nary a soul to confide




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