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    dots Submission Name: Just Need Timedots
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    Author: Aangskate
    ASL Info:    18/male
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 133/117/44
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 569
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Sitting in my tree writing, interrupted by a friend that has spotted me.
    Maybe it's fiend instead of friend!


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    dotsJust Need Timedots
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    All I need is silence,
    Just a little bit of peace,
    Some time of no appointment.

    I want to soak up the sun,
    Listen to the sound of Nature.
    Let her clear my pounding head.

    No space, am I allowed.
    My hiding place is uprooted,
    I've been spotted.

    Too late to run, too late to hide
    I'm caught,
    Back to reality.

    I'll go back kicking and screaming.




    Submitted on 2010-08-10 11:25:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ha! This is light hearted and serious, all at the same time. But either way, it is delightful and fun!

    Nice write; thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2010-08-10 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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