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    dots Submission Name: Find me when your sober.dots
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    Author: cherrywillow
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 29/47/32
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       This is not one of my better poems but I was in a moment of anger when I wrote it so I suppose it should show some emotion


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    dotsFind me when your sober.dots
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    Stop mocking my every word,
    For I know I am not perfect.
    Stop making such foolish remarks
    to make me feel stupid.

    You find yourself funny,
    yet no one dares laugh,
    in fear or in annoyance that
    you will yell back.

    You make promises,
    that you will never fulfill.
    Bottle in hand, your only success
    of the night is to drink yourself to sleep.

    The reflection of the
    one that I had once loved,
    no longer lives up to
    who you have become.

    I am done with all of
    you stupid games,
    so come and find me when
    you're sober...for once.




    Submitted on 2010-08-11 15:04:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       This poem has a lot of meaning to me, I've been on both sides of the fence. I like how you express your frustration and anger. Very good :) The flow was a little off but the emotion in this piece over shadows that...
    | Posted on 2010-08-16 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is sad, but well written. I think it helps to just rant a little about it; get it out. It sounds like you're having to put up with a lot!
    | Posted on 2010-08-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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