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    dots Submission Name: Blindnessdots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    23/Female/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 277/293/232
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsBlindnessdots
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    I wish you'd open your eyes and see
    but I like your blindness better.
    It kills me inside,
    but your blindness is safe.
    I don't need to hide in the shadows,
    just have my feelings locked away.
    Away from the prying eyes
    and accusing stares.
    Everything about it is wrong,
    but I don't care.
    My fantasy world gives me comfort,
    a dream that will never come true.
    I'd rather live in my dreamland
    instead of my real life.
    Everything makes sense there,
    while here I'm walking aimlessly,
    so lost and confused on where I'm going.
    Whenever I find a direction
    it becomes distorted,
    and I can not recognize the way I'm going.
    I feel insane but won't admit.
    Its my little secret,
    locked away in the container of my feelings.
    Its your blindness helps me,
    stops me from overflowing.
    Your blindness feeds into my dreamland,
    it builds up my fantasy
    that I run away to.
    So I could say I hate your blindness,
    but I need your blindness
    here with me.




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      I read this and wonder about the blindness. I wonder how specific you want to be about this particular essential character of your poem.

    I wonder if you mean true blindness but think you mean it metaphorically.

    Like when you feel you are so unlovable and filthy that anyone who wants to be with you must surely have their eyes closed.

    In the safe of darkness. I've had dreams of this nature, of wandering aimlessly at the side of a road with everything light enough only to illuminate silhouettes. A stranger in a strange land.

    It feels somehow violating to have people looking into the dark corners of your life, but sometimes facing things is better than running away. This is why I think so many of us choose others who will play into our fantasy, or at least those who will accept us / not challenge us to change. It's easier in the short term but not so good in the long-view.

    Hard to find a direction when you'd rather not see.

    Take Care,
    soul-hugger
    | Posted on 2010-08-14 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]


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