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    dots Submission Name: my strangerdots
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    Author: wovenwords
    ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108/303/189
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsmy strangerdots
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    We're out in the afternoon,
    finally out of the living room
    wandering 'round the bookstore
    though we don’t know what for

    'Cross the room you're a stranger
    in a colorful sweater
    and I watch as you flip
    through a book about birds.

    I pretend I don't know you,
    it's the first time I saw you,
    that maybe we'll meet
    in the section about trains.

    Your eyes keep on dancing
    your body is leaning
    my beautiful stranger
    all lost in a book.

    Outside some time later
    streets pass in a big blur
    we say we'll meet up
    in a couple of hours

    After time passes slowly
    I walk back quite quickly
    I see you across the street
    at a vendor, on 5th.

    Again, this is novel
    a sighting, quite casual
    your smile is unused
    unwrapped like a gift

    Oh, my false stranger
    your laugh like a chamber
    suddenly strikes me
    a familiar sound.

    It's time that we meet
    in the middle of the street
    for the second, for the third,
    for the millionth time.




    Submitted on 2010-08-13 12:35:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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