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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
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    Bytes: 655



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    i guess i could jus sit here n wait for u all nite but it seems ud rather jus fight n dat shit aint right im doin it again for u all i want dis time is for u to be mine n i already know i cant lie dam boi u got me doin da dam grind u got me thinkin ur fine thinkin ur anything but mine its gettin hard to decribe but bois like u are gettin harder n harder to find im not ready to jus stop n leave all dis behind gimme u gimme everything gimme da world in your eyes gimme your eyes your too scared to be lonely eyes gimme your moans n sighs ur too dam sexy thighs jus as long as u can keep ur own lies and ima be here to help you try to help you try to fly




    Submitted on 2010-08-13 14:18:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey and hi this was very colourful
    i am not up on some of the lingo i guess im old lol
    sandman
    | Posted on 2010-08-13 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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