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    dots Submission Name: Leave As Ashesdots
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    Author: opus
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    What a life to lead.
    To be a vessel for a ghost;
    The voice of a phantom
    That you hear in your head.

    A simple servant to a saint,
    What a life to lead,
    To want to live when you're dead.

    The suit and tie don't do much
    For a man killing time.
    And let's be honest;
    Killing time is all this is
    When you're a man with a window for a head.

    A lot of blood, and no substance.
    You're bound by chains with holy names.

    You would run if you could.
    You would run if you could, man.
    But you know the rules.




    Submitted on 2010-08-13 15:55:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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