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    dots Submission Name: Unknowndots
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    Author: Raye
    ASL Info:    21/female/Okc,Ok
    Elite Ratio:    3.46 - 52/82/35
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 517
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       It's a work in progress. Something that I had been trying to express for awhile now.


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    I opened my eyes and realized that you were gone.
    I realized that I was wrong,
    I can’t even say that I am sorry, not that you would hear me if I tried.

    I wish I could tell you that I loved you.
    I wish I could tell you that I am sorry.
    I wish that I could change it.

    I even thought about what would say,
    As if it would change anything.
    I humiliated you and made you feel horrible.
    I was cruel and mean
    I know I seemed uncaring and cold hearted.

    For this I am sorry,
    As if you would hear my words at all.




    Submitted on 2010-08-14 01:34:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Personal and emotional. A little stumble factor on "I even thought about what would say"...
    (Is it that I would say, or something that would itself say?) when the next line appears to be ending inconclusively at the period instead of having another comma. I was thinking (as if it would change anything) would set that off like an interjection and lead into what is to follow.

    That said, I haven't had any coffee yet so forgive me if I'm rambling.
    | Posted on 2010-08-14 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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