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    dots Submission Name: For Youdots
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    Author: DearlyDeparted
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 211/290/189
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
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    dotsFor Youdots
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    Shaking with frustration.
    I tried to squash the confrontation.
    But enough is enough.
    I didn't want to open my mouth in fear of hurting your feelings.
    Yet, what do I get, but ignorant fucks running their mouths.
    Trying to save the face of another only to have mine spit in.
    I'm not some game playing bitch.
    I'm fucking real with all my shit.
    Take this bullet and cram it in your ear.
    So that maybe it'll help you hear.
    Though I guess my methods can be kind of cryptic.
    Then again I really don't think it's that hard to grip.
    Get this...
    When I want it dropped it's not because I'm saving me, I'm saving you....
    From the angry slick sick venom that may just boil from my lips.
    Try and grasp it before you give me an opening to reek havoc.




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      I LOVE THIS!!!
    reminds me of my days when i first started writing. i love the raw hatred in it. the venting style. the place of words. the rhythm, the rhyming, ALL OF IT, its perfection when it comes to just letting it all out. no doubt about it this MUST be one of my Fave's.

    my favorite line(s):
    I'm [censored] real with all my [censored].
    Take this bullet and cram it in your ear.
    So that maybe it'll help you hear.
    Though I guess my methods can be kind of cryptic.
    Then again I really don't think it's that hard to grip.

    brilliant!! gawd i miss having the ability to feel like this. keep up[ the good work
    | Posted on 2010-09-15 00:00:00 | by Thief | [ Reply to This ]
      DAM! and i'm first to comment CRAZY

    wow well this is amazing you are venting and you do such a great job everything fits perfectly I LOVE IT all

    omg wow! thanks for posting this

    FAVORIT LINE: Trying to save the face of another only to have mine spit in.

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2010-08-29 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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