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    dots Submission Name: Sonnet - The Hurricane dots

    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 16
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSonnet - The Hurricane dots

    Turn - Turn -- Turning --- So slow the maelstrom
    Her heart blazes; vigilant in passion.

    Submitted on 2010-08-16 00:22:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think (in all fairness) that if you do write a sonnet that you should post it as a haiku. Then all this mock seriousness will be justified. :)
    | Posted on 2010-08-16 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm going to assume this is an unfinished piece, because as far as that goes, I'd really like to see the rest of the sonnet. (As Hanuman pointed out... a two word piece is definitely not a sonnet, and there are other conditionals as well depending on the particular sonnet form you're trying to follow.) Something about the contrast between a slow-turning maelstrom and the swiftness of a fire.
    | Posted on 2010-08-16 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]
      Free verse is free verse. A sonnet is constrained by tye rules of the sonnet form. Rule one - it should have 14 lines. 2 down, 12 to go.
    | Posted on 2010-08-16 00:00:00 | by hanuman | [ Reply to This ]

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