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Author: bigohhh1
ASL Info:    31/M/Fl
Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 25 /21 /37
Words: 144
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I am not the Fiend
Nor are you my methadone
I will not beg for my daily dosing
Not anymore
That lie has been deconstructed
And so has the evil archetype
Left with a longing though and understanding
Funny how a commitment to the truth
can be thrown away dashed to the floor
as soon as its not useful anymore
I put my star in your hands
And that was my fault
faulty belief systems
I am ready for this life
Eyes are open again
Ears too
Sad you wont talk to see or hear
And Now I crave God again
I tricked myself in to self loathing
I am beging to want to love me
But I feel still you believe I deserve
to die
So die I will but it wont be without

Submitted on 2010-08-16 13:04:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  great! I like this very much... had a diffcult time following your thoughts at the begining seemed a bit scattered on what you were trying to say but I am glad you kept with it and posted this.
I saw the topic of this write is "Love" and as far as that goes I feel when I open my heart to someone when I let them into my world allow them to know my inner most secrets... and in the end for whatever reason things do not work out between this person and I, untimately leaving me hurt/with a broken heart. I look at that (my broken heart) as being no ones fault but my own because I am the one who allowed another to know me so well I am the one who told my secrets to another.

Thats my opinon... sorry I ramble
Needless to say this is great write thanks for posting

| Posted on 2010-08-17 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]

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