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    dots Submission Name: Falls of Sorrowdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFalls of Sorrowdots

    It falls to me
    This sorrow

    Alone, as if the world is weeping
    Inside of me
    Outside of me

    Alone in the firmament
    Within its bubble of isolation
    It cries
    Amidst the stars

    A thousand tears pressed and wept against its skin
    In the follicles of an agony
    Described in silence
    In denial

    Sorrow, which eats at a million hearts
    And chokes itself with every smile

    Of such an oppressive burden
    It falls on me
    This sadness
    And gnaws at another bone of doubt

    It is not mine
    Not mine
    Though it lingers like some berated child
    And full swell the tears
    To fill my eyes
    And speak with words constricted and burnt
    Hang their import
    In the back of my throat

    Alone in the firmament
    It cries amidst the stars

    A billion tears pushed and shed against this skin
    As if wept from the follicles of its agony
    Witnessed in denial
    In silence

    Submitted on 2010-08-17 14:17:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This piece for me puts the Universal spin on but in not just the positive but the negative as well.

    You had a few great one line sentiments in here and I liked the piece overall!


    Enjoy the day with love, peace, joy, abundance & smiles to share ;-) ;-) ;-)
    | Posted on 2010-08-18 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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