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    dots Submission Name: Sonnet - The Hurricane & The Matchdots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 75/186/232
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSonnet - The Hurricane & The Matchdots
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    Turn - Turn -- Turning --- Slowly in the maelstrom,
    she was roiling with passion; care free.
    Thump - Thump -- Thumping --- Her heart kept up - strum.
    Everything and one perished; lost at sea-

    Debris: A wandering ray of light;
    yet no shelter or a way for her to find.
    With in her dripping hands she'll find me - kind.
    One strike and I'll become her way through night.

    Love - Love -- Loving --- Coveting with no peek,
    she holds on strong, as with out choice; smother-
    Die - Die -- Dying --- My flame, warmth she does seek.
    She turns; looks - Am I like no... No other?

    Understand her heart --- it's a hurricane.
    I am her match - the warmth, the sparking flame.




    Submitted on 2010-08-17 20:53:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is possibly some of the best I have read from you, the piece read concise and colorful with just the right balance to make it work. I struggle with sonnets but feel you have pulled this one together real well, good work.
    | Posted on 2010-08-18 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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