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    dots Submission Name: One Foot Around Anotherdots

    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsOne Foot Around Anotherdots

    "What if" flutters in and flirts with my mind
    It rolls over every debate that I find
    And draws away doubt with a sparkling hope
    But if I'm hanging myself, it supplies rope

    And I Struggle with this reality I'm given
    Sometimes doubt the very reason I'm driven
    And when I want to give up and leave
    "What if" brings me back to the scene

    And I'd lie to say I wasn't glad
    Hope within, a persistant tad
    But it doesn't melt this heart ache's grief
    Because a broken heart has no relief

    And more about heart ache's facade
    It's origin quite sporadic and broad
    For it is relived more than one might expect
    What excruciation the heart does erect

    Yet love beguiles you all, as it does me
    And you wade into a place where you can't quite see
    You're left with memories and lessons when everything breaks
    Some say it's strengthening, from wherever love takes

    But I'm not here for some damn self enrichment
    And time will fade memories while others are bent
    And I'm tired of looking at your picture again
    But I don't want to return to where we began

    Nor do I want things where we left off
    Take more than that to send me aloft
    What I really want is to get to know you now
    Meet the new you, win her heart somehow

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    ||| Comments |||
      this is another good write...nice rhyme scheme...

    maybe one or two lines a bit wordy and trippy, but in a way they work, because too smooth indicates a flowing..like a perfectly flowing heart or relationship...and here that is not what it is...

    there is a hole in the heart, a missing...

    that i want sated....but not the same as we had before...you have moved on, changed, but i want to get to know that person...and capture her heart...

    sometimes it's not too late to recapture the feeling..and when both have learned by past mistakes, it can be better.

    | Posted on 2011-03-21 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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