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    dots Submission Name: Why can't you hear me?dots
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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsWhy can't you hear me?dots
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    My eyes blaze a burning hole to each corner they shall turn.
    My lips echo words of hurt, speechless yet, unlistening ears to learn.
    My ears burrow deep harnassing a force, seen not heard.
    In my mind a tortured soul seeks vengeance, kept withold a timeless patience in the utmost, forced.
    My heart it screams in agony, its once thoughtful whispers challenged within verse.
    Every being I portray speaks the same syllable, aching to be heard,
    Yet silence is all that surrounds me, an unforgivable curse.




    Submitted on 2010-08-19 08:26:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved the being of this post however the last few lines had me slightly confused nevertheless you painted a picture within my mind i like this keep up the good work

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2010-08-19 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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