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TrusT in a new FroNtier

Author: mtg1988
ASL Info:    22/m/ca
Elite Ratio:    8 - 7 /1 /4
Words: 184
Class/Type: Poetry /Friendship
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TrusT in a new FroNtier

As I bust off the rust

Of this crust of trust,

I realize that there's decay

And a permanent chemical burn;

A permanent stain;

A rotten decay of the finish

That we built and time

I thought could never diminish.

I don't understand,

Was this trust simply canned?

Was it all an allusion;

A dream- mine own delusion,

Created through lies and confusion?

I don't know and I don't care.

Everywhere I turn to look

The world reveals itself bare

And muddy as beneath the churning brook;

Like I offered an apple and wine

And everything offered was lost in time;

Lost in space and moved out of place.

I distrust your smile and compassionate air.

Who knew that you'd really not care?

But no matter I now leave this song,

This moldy bread and untethered metal

I never could settle for a deflowered petal

Emotions brew and disbeliefs stew

But I could swear that I always knew...

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