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    dots Submission Name: The Leading Edgedots
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    Author: mtg1988
    ASL Info:    22/m/ca
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 7/1/4
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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    dotsThe Leading Edgedots
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    A twin bladed sword of fire and wrath
    Set to dispatch all that he hath
    Rimmed in blood and stone-dried tears
    Possessing a handle worn through the years.

    Controlled through rage and anger and love
    Introduced to battle from the battle above
    Possessing two edges, both sharp and keen
    Leading up to a tip, pointed and pristine.

    An edge from the near and another the far,
    Both as dangerous as the greatest czar
    The one the shallow the other aware
    the two as diverse as two merchants' wares.

    The shallow is hallow and swings back on its own
    cleaving in two the plated breastwork of stone
    Destroying its master if given the chance
    If he should prove himself through inadequate stance.

    The aware is audible when it cracks through helms
    Departing the demons of the nether realms
    Giving itself in glorious tribute
    So no wanderer's eyes can behold and refute.

    The knowing blade of the sword in excellence crafted
    To spare the the innocent lest they be drafted
    But the shallow was crafted in equal but lesser metal
    But yet only the master's hand can this dual settle.




    Submitted on 2010-08-19 16:52:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Interesting, a little confusing. I'm not sure how this is religious poetry.
    Needs a little editing
    dual-duel

    -Will
    | Posted on 2010-09-01 00:00:00 | by Rhythmal | [ Reply to This ]


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