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Chasing the Dream

Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
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Words: 71
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Chasing the Dream

Running away from my own dreams,
Regurgitating. Suffocating. from this disease.
It takes and burns, everything I earn
It swallows and begs for more,
Leaves me with pain & tears,
Outside my own front door,
Heartless. Broken. broke-

& I beg and I cry, sifting through lies
Tired and worn, repairing what's torn
"god, if this is what it is,
I don't want it anymore.
Not anymore. Not anymore."

Submitted on 2010-08-20 06:30:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I have often found myself in the same position and frame of mind-sacrificing my true sense of self and dreams for some unknown cause. I love the beauty found in crying out to God. Very well written.
| Posted on 2010-08-22 00:00:00 | by robertbwell | [ Reply to This ]
  Sounds like something an angel is speaking what is heartfelt on their knees.Saying something that can nolonger be or will be nomore.This reminds me of the ppl who live in this world who strive so hard to be what others want them to be so they chase a mirage.But is'nt it more than that? Of course it is.This says to me.THE ANGEL THAT CHASES ANGELIC PERFECTION BEGINS TO HAVE A WEAKENED HEART.One can give up at trying to achieve a specific dream, fantasy, lifestyle whatever.It's not whether whos wrong or whos right at sometimes but it's up to every individual to pick up pieces.Stay far fromthe things that bring pain and less joy bc really you have to ask yourself.What will or makes me truly happy.What brings me the outstanding joy.When you categorized this as a love poem I can only accept that bc this is how ppl feel everyday and they get back up out of the love, respect and dignity they have for themselves to move on and move past a broken dream that was once everything to them.I know a lot about that.This was a good piece to me based on pain that is.Cool pic btw.Peace
| Posted on 2010-08-21 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]

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