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    dots Submission Name: Slumlord part Idots
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    Author: bigohhh1
    ASL Info:    31/M/Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 25/21/37
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 261
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 679



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    dotsSlumlord part Idots
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    Would you try and rent this heart?
    I apologize but it's been condemned
    The previous tenant did the best they could
    But I am afraid the owner was a slumlord
    And he was partial to the previous tenant
    As a matter of fact he sits outside of it all day and night
    Waiting
    Praying
    Crying
    Waiting for them to return...
    But regardless it IS condemned
    He has fixed it up a bit
    But it's not livable
    He swears she would know what to do with it though
    Oh but we are not fixer uppers!
    This one does not need fixing
    Its in disarray but so badly it is
    condemned




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