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    dots Submission Name: Slumlord part Idots

    Author: bigohhh1
    ASL Info:    31/M/Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.35 - 25/21/37
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsSlumlord part Idots

    Would you try and rent this heart?
    I apologize but it's been condemned
    The previous tenant did the best they could
    But I am afraid the owner was a slumlord
    And he was partial to the previous tenant
    As a matter of fact he sits outside of it all day and night
    Waiting for them to return...
    But regardless it IS condemned
    He has fixed it up a bit
    But it's not livable
    He swears she would know what to do with it though
    Oh but we are not fixer uppers!
    This one does not need fixing
    Its in disarray but so badly it is

    Submitted on 2010-08-21 00:09:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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