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Fatherly Thoughts


Author: Ontlogicalamity
ASL Info:    33/M/NY
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I have tentatively decided on a title. Let me know what you think. The piece itself is the result of some heavy thought after a heavy conversation in which I found out some pretty heavy things. Critiques are welcome, along with any other thoughts.


Fatherly Thoughts



When you're a kid you don't understand these things.
Your father is God, and He does what He does.
He's always right.

Then you grow up a little bit.
All you can remember is the admirable, the virtuous.
He always was right.

You have a late night chat with a sibling.
She tells of a dark side you don't recall.
You can't believe her.

Finally the memories you strategically omitted
Come flooding back to your consciousness.
He was wrong.

You're confused. You don't know how to feel.
You consider confronting Him about the past.
What purpose would it serve?

You can't stay angry with Him.
You know He's changed, and He's sorry.
You forgive Him.




Submitted on 2004-07-26 12:06:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  UGH. Disgusting, but I also like this one.

Sorry for the strange openings, but you captured a lot of my other thoughts. Very nice share here. Forgive your father for he did not know what he'd done...I'll think of that when we meet and i'm successful and secure and he's dying and headed sure for hell.
Ok, harsh. I'll think about it.
| Posted on 2004-11-06 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]
  oooh...at least you can forgive in the end, right. my father...not virtuous. didn't even think so when i was a kid, because i DID know things. and i know even more now. and memories...oh, god...they can be killer sometimes, specially the ones you manage to "omit". they bite in the ass hard.

um, anyhow...i llike the title. its a good one, for now at least, if your thinkin of changin it. it says a lot about the kind of person you are...my dad's changed a few of his real bad habits (i.e. doesn't hit us anymore) but its hard for me to begin even seeing a path to forgiveness, cuz of the way it made us, my mom, turn out...but i admire you for your heart. its certainly overcome mountains. you're amazing the more i read about...lots of love, this is very deep and hopefully helps you in ways as well, coming to grips with yourself and your family. dig up the memories, do what you think is best...and put them to bed. see ya, write on~april
| Posted on 2004-08-08 00:00:00 | by leper messiah | [ Reply to This ]
  Um...that was a good poem...I guess. It's juss not my type of poetry cause I am not religious, but if I was, I'd say very good.
| Posted on 2004-07-26 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
  Well first off I think its rough, but I like that about it.
Kind of like the thoughts running around in your head had no where else to go except paper. PErsonally I ahve no idea what these events are your reffering to and I will have to inquire about that at a later date, but my feeling is sometimes things in the apst are just better off there buried and dead, if life moves on for the better. We all have our skeletons in the closet.
| Posted on 2004-07-26 00:00:00 | by Mithrandir | [ Reply to This ]
  I don't get it. I mean...How is this poetry? -.- Hm...I dunno, I guess it's just not at all my uh..'type'. Good luck with finding a name. ;)
| Posted on 2004-07-26 00:00:00 | by Shuurinakisame | [ Reply to This ]


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