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    Author: BestxDeceptions
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Kentucky.
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 25/66/49
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsEmptydots
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    When do dreams
    become fragments,
    memories,
    death?

    How can something
    so warming and
    elegant
    turn ugly?

    If you could tell me
    why
    I would be eternally
    grateful.

    If you should speak
    to me in a tone
    less hostile
    I think I'd faint.

    It takes nothing
    to feel something
    and something to
    feel empty.




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      Although your question might not be directed at the reader I thought I would answer . It could be something as simple as having your super ego make off with your alter ego leaving your ego mired and wallowing in self doubt and feelings of inadequacy . I have a friend who has night terrors . I feel this is a by-product of being taken advantage of at a young age by her uncle . Upon reading this piece I get the impression someone close to you who should be a part of the warmth of your dreams is acting hostile , and that this is something new . I can understand how that could be disconcerting and leave you feeling empty . I empathize . I hope your futurities are full of timely epiphanies and reversal of fortunes . If not then I guess your just going to have to get down and get over it .

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2010-09-30 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      Such a self thought empty feeling... It is deep piercing and mind clearing. Eternally and forever is emptiness and life fills the void.
    | Posted on 2010-08-25 00:00:00 | by 13thprotector | [ Reply to This ]
      Deep thoughts, but writing style is somewhat original. In answer to your question.... find out for yourself
    | Posted on 2010-08-22 00:00:00 | by refman869 | [ Reply to This ]


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