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    dots Submission Name: Eile Grámharadots
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    Author: JoeCowan
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    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       just about some conflicts within me


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    dotsEile Grámharadots
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    Not often heard, such coral springs
    That expand and bend and lever things.
    Like clicking ticks in rotating wheels,
    Inside our heads, on highest heels.

    But works are there, inside my head
    That amount to little like seamless threads
    For I rust and jam and stick and crack
    But beneath my chest my heart's intact.

    It's seen its age of drowning oft'
    In selfish tears from selfish thoughts
    And its had its shock from running red
    But it is weak, like wheels in my head

    But i made it not, as i oft' forget
    (My swelling pride hasn't left me yet)
    But deliberate it is, a plan i know little
    So i follow the track and sit an twiddle.

    My eyes on sky and fists in front
    My feet on road so rough and blunt
    My heart, I know, its left to fell
    As i should see, my Nimrodel

    But I know my place, and it's dark nutrition
    But I shall provide a disposition
    For love is my sword, and LOVE my lover
    From brinks of life or eternal slumber




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      sweet It made feel like falling love again it's sweet and straight foward and to the point
    keep it up ;)
    | Posted on 2010-08-22 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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