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    dots Submission Name: AFLOATdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dots AFLOATdots
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    Clarity surrounding
    the clear blue taking up the space between my head and my toes
    as I look down past the reflection of a canopy and the sky beyond

    I travel lightly
    and hold inside
    air for my lungs
    and love
    for my heart to continue beating







    Submitted on 2010-08-22 11:38:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree with by my shadow. This piece feels like you are giving a connection with the writers spirit. An thats the best poetry. Even if you don't like the style that it is written, you still know its a good write.
    | Posted on 2010-08-25 00:00:00 | by xxiknownowxx | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, I like this - makes me have a good feeling. I feel I have connected with the writer's spirit. There is no better poetry than that.
    | Posted on 2010-08-24 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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