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    dots Submission Name: Foggeddots
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    Author: Maskannai
    ASL Info:    28/Female/Utah
    Elite Ratio:    4.94 - 214/184/78
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 429
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       Thinking about hiding feelings and how others can sometimes see them anyway.. Gimme what ya got for criticism or opinions..


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    dotsFoggeddots
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    Staring at you through
    a fogged up window
    I cannot see you clearly;

    Perhaps if I brushed
    my hand across the glass
    it would clear my view;

    But on that same note
    if I leave you alone
    you won't have to see my sorrow;

    My eyes are the windows
    into my very soul
    and you would only have to look once;

    Within their sad gaze
    you would see my world
    and feel my heartache within;

    I am not one known
    for spreading my pain
    to others who happen to be around me;

    But if you care to look
    and want to wipe away the fog
    I will allow you just one glance.




    Submitted on 2010-08-22 20:44:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "as if seen through a glass darkly"; and, we wonder.

    Truth is, the self is always alone, and struggles to find compatible company and the approval of others, but it is still always alone.......

    Learning to be at peace with our aloneness is part of life's struggle..

    Your muse has us all doing some introspection!

    I hope he does look, and I hope he sees you with tenderness and caring......and recognizes your radiance.
    | Posted on 2011-02-03 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Hell, I have been shaving for fifty years and the face I see today when I wipe the mirror is one whose secrets I'm glad I forgot. But the face I was shaving at first was so beautiful. Would we really like to know more than one person that well??

    This poem made me think about that. "If I leave you alone ..." is the line that brings it all together.

    I so like this verse-form too, and you do it well. Sorry, I'm a useless critic today but enjoyed reading your work!
    | Posted on 2010-08-22 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]


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