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    dots Submission Name: Through The Ashes Through The Graydots

    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 75/194/254
    Words: 372
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 983
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       This was a total re-visioning of a piece I wrote over 10 years ago.

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    dotsThrough The Ashes Through The Graydots

    You grip that picture tight -
    Condemn the memories that bring dead faces back to life -
    One burning ember to keep the shadows at bay
    Continue on page by page -
    - Through the ashes through the gray

    You scowl heaven side, the sky roiled as dark turned to night -
    Pray - oh God pray -
    One more candle to keep the haunted awake.
    Continue on; wish and pray
    - Through the ashes through the gray

    A second reflection in the mirror -
    Cynical face seen turned away in shame, hanging - hanging on the wall
    Slick the wick - hand in hand with that wicked fire -
    Turn your lantern and reflect what it is you desire -
    - Through the ashes through the gray

    A soliloquy was scribbled - A headstone a grave -
    Ivy would play macabre games, hiding the name of the souls that has been so far deprived of the dawn; day
    Fumble for the match - Strike - Strike - All but one soaked -
    - Through the ashes through the gray

    Silence -
    You blew out the flame in an attempt to stifle the eyes
    Moonlight gave a passage - Illuminate what time did take
    So cold is the moment when you realize -
    - Through the ashes through the gray

    A stupor; somber moment -
    An answer undesired was never to be found -
    Perfect darkness - Perfect silence
    It was her name inscribed; you were not to be found -
    - Through the ashes through the gray

    Heaven side your eyes once again find, dawn brings only gray skies -
    Pray - oh God pray -
    Drunk on Brandy wine - Sit down; rest for a while
    For a moment you closed your eyes - Pneumonia - Raining all night - Slipping - Slipping away
    - You forgot that moment, ethereal voice "please don't stay"
    ...but you were to busy dying for forgiveness to be eternally saved -
    Through the ashes -
    - Through the gray

    Submitted on 2010-08-23 18:56:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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