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    dots Submission Name: World's Enddots

    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 406
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 546
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       Not much of a scheme, more of an emotional rant feel. Too many emotions bottled up, hard to focus on any form of structure at the moment. Hopefully, I can release some of the pressure and be able to write something with some form of solid structure soon.

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    dotsWorld's Enddots

    Life is rough but we knew it would be
    But whatever happened to those days
    We knew we'd stop at nothing then
    Through the good and the bad, hand in hand
    And I know I left to find myself, a couple of times
    But I've learned with time, that's an impossible task
    How can I find myself out there, in the cold, dark world
    When myself has been waiting beside you, all along
    Just take my hand
    Why do you make it off like it's not that simple?
    There's nothing on earth that I wouldn't do
    And if I ever convince you to want me again
    No matter the circumstances we're in
    I'll make it so.
    I remember that girl who would fight the world
    Just to see me, nothing more
    And I remember the glow in her eyes
    And I felt the reflection from my own
    We were like magnets back then
    No force could be strong enough to pull us apart
    But it looks like there was one after all
    And no it wasn't distance, we've had that before
    No distance is great enough, I'll find you.
    And no it wasn't the fights
    They were simply the aggressive spark in us
    And they were all harmless concerns in any case
    They always led us to a better appreciation
    Usually to tears, but always arm in arm, hand in hand
    Together as one, the tears would fade
    And I know you have to remember, the memories are too strong
    I remember more than a dozen times a day
    But, no, what did finally seperate us I think
    Through all the strains we had survived before
    Was time.
    And I just hope with all of my heart and soul
    That time will come around, and bring you back to me
    It owes me that much, it's taken everything I care about
    Yet, I could forgive time for giving you back
    And I always told you, don't worry. Everything will get better
    That everything will work out with time
    And as true as that statement may be
    Well, I wish someone could reassure me
    I don't want to forget the wonders we shared
    But if it's going to be long or forever
    It would be nice, if I wasn't reminded every three seconds
    Or even if the fuzzy feeling of butterflies
    Wasn't immediately replaced
    By the longing and despair
    Of a man who lost the world.

    Submitted on 2010-08-24 04:11:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Sometimes when your with the ONE.The good times lead to bad times and you don't see them coming, but it's like you what you stated.Tears would fade? I question myself on this one.At the time you wrote this.Where you feeling you were'nt gonna get that back? Bc It could have been: "Together as one, tears will fade

    I thinks it's an okay read more of because i can relate.Absolutely reflective.

    "We knew we'd stop at nothing then"

    "And I remember the glow in her eyes
    And I felt the reflection from my own"

    Your feelings are all over the place here And you need some periods.

    Good poem no doubt but if theres interest of your writing.Then I suggest you update it.

    | Posted on 2010-08-25 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]

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