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    dots Submission Name: Cheryl Mayberrydots
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    Author: coloredstone
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 99/60/37
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Cheryl, cheryl, Cheryl. I feel sorry for her.


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    dotsCheryl Mayberrydots
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    I was drawn by external appearances.
    As a young girl, I dreamed,
    And my dream came true.
    My husband and I lived in a cute little
    House, with golden walls.
    Those were the days
    That I would always remember.
    We had a daughter, and we called her Sophie.
    She kept me busy-
    And at first I didn't notice, and then I did
    That the doctor had changed.
    He was rude, he was mean,
    He became unbearably cruel.
    I once could not bear to be away from him
    But now, I could not bear to be with him.
    I wished he would just go away
    And one day he did.
    I saw it on the news
    When his plane crashed.
    There were survivors, but there was
    Nothing to hear of mine.
    I was one of the people
    Who drowned that day.




    Submitted on 2010-08-24 14:25:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Amazing write! I really feel all of the emotions from her love to hate. Im impressed by all of these charecters!
    Keep it up high as a kite!
    Fana
    | Posted on 2010-08-27 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]


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