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    dots Submission Name: C. S. Curtaindots
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    Author: coloredstone
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 99/60/37
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 548
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       But he never said so.


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    dotsC. S. Curtaindots
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    I know that people who see me
    Think that I am partially insane.
    There is nothing wrong with me inside.
    I was one among eleven brothers
    Who shared a father of prosperity.
    My father left each of his sons some legacy.
    He left the estate, properties, stocks, cash, bonds, and business
    But the debt was mine.
    For I was the artist
    And my father, a logician
    Who could not bear my bold resistance
    To medicine, finance, and the law.
    He could not fight me while I lived
    But he had his vengeance when he died.
    I was penniless and poor
    And my wife was ill.
    It was for her that I went far from home
    So that I could make money as a peddler
    Where the debtors of my father could not find me.
    I know that people
    Just make up their minds about others, and label them as
    Crazy, rude, unfriendly or however else they please.
    But they do not know
    What people carry in their hearts.




    Submitted on 2010-08-24 14:27:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This actually strikes me as a great way to start a story. You've not only grabbed our attention but you've hit us all where it (probably) hurts. Nobody goes through life without falling victim to judgemental thinking and harsh judgements at that. For this reason, we can all feel like we know and have a connection with this character (despite the fact that I doubt it will help us to stop acting in such a manner toward strangers). That alone is a great way to bring in readers and keep them reading - they would care enough about this man to see where his life could lead... Have you thought about writing stories? Or even just character references? You seem like a natural :).
    | Posted on 2010-09-19 00:00:00 | by stefhy | [ Reply to This ]
      Great plot. It feels like i know him, because i see so many of him out on the streets. The cruelty i cant understand how a parent could do that to a child especially if he had other children who he treated differently.

    Gosh im hit.
    Fana
    | Posted on 2010-08-27 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      Well the reason there was no comment at first bc it got deleted by me accidentally logging out and having to go back to work before another quick chance to type it all over again(Which I got pissed, blaming my PC).No big deal though, I have another.It was pretty long too actually.I like this piece and it's a fav bc I simply deal with this almost everyday.Ppl who percieve others the wrong way when really the unknown human being is being gossiped about, judged entirely too harsh or just plainly misunderstood.What we carry in our hearts is beyond, more profound and greater than what we look like.How we dress.Sometimes I come in the presence of ppl without speaking to them as of saying Hi bc it initiates coversations about things that ammuse them more than concern them and that hurts.I must say as a human being you did a fantastic job here of portraying that.Peace and inspiration be with you.I also seen personal matters dealing with the lines of your father and his expectations o f you , before his passing.I'm sorry for your loss.I'm gonna make some effort to read your other works.

    RG
    | Posted on 2010-08-27 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


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