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    dots Submission Name: Andy Benjamindots
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    Author: coloredstone
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    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       It does not matter what you were in this world; what matters is what you have prepared for the next.


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    dotsAndy Benjamindots
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    Heir to a fortune
    Master of a foundation
    Owner of an academy
    Mayor of the people, and then
    Governor too.
    This is how they know me.
    Once in a blue moon I stop to
    Ask myself: And what am I?
    Known by nothing but
    Faint marks on the world.
    Some things just come to some--
    But not Paradise!
    I rushed about with my work in life
    While the others spend their nights in prayer.
    I had no mother to care for in her old age, nor a father.
    I had two daughters, pathway to paradise,
    But how many years did I raise them
    Before they shot me, and I died?
    Keeper of a fortune
    Master of a foundation
    Candidate for the presidency
    What faint marks on this transitionary earth.
    The one thing I grant myself to give me hope
    Is that, with all I had and was, I tried.




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      I've said it once and I'll say it again.It has the invisible storyline that is there but you can't see the amazing clear enough.All pointed at the gripping character.
    | Posted on 2011-03-17 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      I believe this would be a awesome account if it would have been gone into more deeper story wise but that does not mean it isn't as the way it is.

    Speaks of an concerned man flawed or rather hurt resulting in some shock revolving around a mass accumulation of wealth coming to grips with existence.
    | Posted on 2011-03-15 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I am utterly stuned. Im going to come back to this one later. Wow so much depth in just a few words.

    Fana
    | Posted on 2010-08-27 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]


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