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    dots Submission Name: Loving Youdots
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    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 54/139/173
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 529
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 328



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    dotsLoving Youdots
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    Lo and behold.
    The makers satisfaction.
    Through love condense your hate.
    With hope we'll glide with fate.
    As night we'll darken the sky.
    As day we'll rise up high.
    Hold my hand and follow me.
    Take my lead and you will see.
    Loving you was never easy.




    Submitted on 2010-08-24 15:20:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      even though this piece is really short, i absolutely love it. the only thing i can find wrong with it right off the top of my head is the fact that you don't give us any clues as to what its about. maybe in the description you could let the reader know if it was about an ex girlfriend, or if you just started writing one day an this is what came to be. other than that its really good. goin on my faves list.
    | Posted on 2010-08-25 00:00:00 | by kession | [ Reply to This ]


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