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    dots Submission Name: untitleddots

    Author: xXgoresavvvyXx
    Elite Ratio:    1.62 - 0/0/1
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    We look up.
    She could see it,
    But I was the only one who could feel it.

    The fear in her eyes.
    Caught in the self inflicted pain in mine.
    This feeling surrounds me,
    Like an apathetic summer night.

    It all felt warm and whole
    For once. [cuts]
    But, I still felt insecure. [Deeper it goes.]

    As the “fear” starts pouring out,
    The lightheadedness took over me.
    With the last bit of selfishness I never had,
    It all vanished.

    Suddenly, the air around stood still
    My mind was at peace.
    I give you all thanks for what you’ve done [im.home]

    Awaken suddenly.
    Consciousness brings me back.
    Why couldn’t I just stay
    Because god told me,
    “Because, sweetie your life doesn’t end with today”

    Submitted on 2010-08-24 16:31:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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