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    dots Submission Name: The Melancholy Waters Liedots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/211
    Words: 362
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Melancholy Waters Liedots
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    He stood afar, afraid of what he might see.
    Those white rapids: faces shifting like the statues memory at the town square - frozen he stares - yet no one is ever the same.
    Unnoticed by the current, he noticed a small body of deathly still water; yet below it roiled and sunk deep into Hell.
    "The melancholy waters lie."
    A whisper, harsh enough to shiver the spine.

    The shore gasped as the cold abyss slashed, he could no longer ignore the river's alluring grasp.
    Turpentine in his blood, he slowly began to separate.
    "The melancholy waters lie."
    The wind came as a final grace; he shook his head and hurried away

    In his mind that face continued to rise from the depths of water - colors: midnight and azure sky combined.
    So familiar, he thought the way of the face, the part of the hair and the squint of the eyes.
    A face he knew, yet knew not; A face that always seemed - forgotten.
    "The melancholy waters lie.
    Moon light, alas! Lead me to that river and all of its fright."


    Thickets and thorns, every tree sprouted to heed him on his way.
    Clawing as the light faded from the sky, not a star watched at the river's edge, this night;
    He arrived.
    Quiet, not a rapid tumbled over another, the shore did not gasp... The world knew, yet he didn't seem to see.
    He spoke as he dredged into the abyss, up to his neck he began to swim stroke after stroke until he reached the the depth which his heart spoke.
    "The melancholy waters lie."
    The face had come to mind... And dawn has come to life.
    He looked up from the water to see a face so familiar...
    The pale color of his eyes, the part of his hair and the face so familiar, yet it seems to be- forgotten.

    A last gasp as the water suffocates his cry, he only tried to save himself from the tragedy; doomed to repeat the woes of his life - forgotten spirit forgot his crimes.

    "The melancholy waters lie."




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