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    dots Submission Name: The Warriors of Grey pt1dots

    Author: williamwallace
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    dotsThe Warriors of Grey pt1dots

    A boy begining his tale,
    To king and country he should hale,
    He hears the call far and adrift,
    Hoping its continuous call with the wind shall shift,
    His hardened heart begs to be atoned,
    But he fears the darkness shall keep him alone,
    So far away the warmth sits quiet,
    Leaving a cold storm in his heart to riot,
    His soul and mind battle for the lead,
    He"s part saint and demon just a half breed,
    His father the saint prays the lord saves him,
    But his chances to live grows the more dim,
    his mind cries to spill evil's blood,
    But he is halted by the play in the mud,
    His hand feels at home around the hilt of the sword,
    He begs for justice from Jesus Christ Lord,
    His path is halted to his own fate,
    His heart stores up anger and hate,
    The confliction of good and evil stands strong,
    He knows what is right but leads towards wrong,
    He jumps on his horse hand on hilt,
    His heart has taken weakness now strength it has built,
    he cries to his brothers killian, shaemus and brian,
    "Tonight men will die and mother's will be cryin'
    for justice to be served for their tragic pain,
    people will cheer and yell for we are the evil bane,"
    And with words so true and just,
    The warriors of grey started their journey of trust,
    With the trod of their steeds,
    and the hope of their deeds,
    they rode into the night seeking evils dormant slumber,
    they would fight to the end no matter what they incumber,
    the long dirt road fought the hooves of their horses,
    but their eyes were vigilant of lurking evil forces,
    Brians long sword covered his curved sword,
    hes was quick and fast and could take on any horde,
    Killian's double daggers could slice through metal,
    but the wit of his mind would leave any man unsettled,
    Shaemus's axe was great and strong
    but for the strength of his heart men would write great songs,
    the four would ride till the helpless need saving,
    for the blood of evil their weapons were craving,
    not to long after their journey journey for blood,
    demons rose from the thick of the mud,
    Adniel, our hero, drew his sword with a cry for vengeance,
    he yelled into the dusk, "Their blood shall be there repentance,"
    The four horsemen rode hard into battle
    their weapons raged it was a slaughter of cattle,
    his sword slashed and cut through the bones of his foe,
    the felt his pain more than they know,
    Brian's sword slashed with the grace of a swan
    he used the blood to paint red the dawn,
    Killian's quick moves left many to stumble,
    his clarity was as beautiful as an ensemble,
    Jesse's axe fell with a righteous ring,
    many a man would mistake him a king,
    the battle raged but soon it was finished
    finally all but one had diminished,
    adniel grabbed him by the base of the throat
    the demon growled a most hideous note,
    his eyes raged like the anger of the seas
    he forced his capture up to his knees,
    "Here me now you fiend of the night
    I am the new base of your fright
    I will hunt down till you all find end
    the troubles of good men will i amend
    when you are lurking behind your prey
    my sword will be ready to slay
    when your gut feels the need of an innocents life
    instead i will fill it with the blade of my knife
    I am now what goes bump in the night
    I will match your darkness with darkness so stay out of sight,
    so go to your king high in his tower,
    and inform him of what i say so he may cower,
    the demon fled as fast as he could,
    he would do as adniel say he should,
    the warriors of grey set the fire for night,
    it cooked their mutton and provided them light,
    the warriors of grey ate with all silence,
    it was as though they all sat on lone islands
    Adniel spoke breaking their streak,
    he lifted his eyes so their gazes would meet,
    "Tomorrow we enter the town of port haven,
    to find men who's blades are also blood cravin'"

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